Sunday, May 06, 2007

Luo's Flapping Participial Phrase, Redundant Subordinating Conjunction

With New Clout, Antiwar Groups Push Democrats


Published: May 6, 2007

But that diversity can also create some tense moments, as each of the groups have different constituencies and some of the groups are more invested in the Democratic Party than others.

Each has: don’t let an intervening prepositional phrase between the subject and verb throw you. Comma goes after “constituencies” for two-independent-clauses comma rule.

…to report back on progress being made by the Iraqi government.

Wordy: Dump flapping participial phrase.

He emphasized that the next emergency spending bill must be one “to end the war.”

If the subordinating conjunction “that” is not the subject of the subordinate clause, you may dump it. You have a cleaner, leaner sentence if you do here.


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